Thursday, 26 August 2021

The present.


This is my 100 word story,
The only thing I found difficult was getting exactly 100 words,
it is a really good video for you to watch here is the  link.

There is a boy in a dark room sitting on the couch with a grumpy look on his face. Then his mum comes in from the front door and has a box in her hands. She puts it in front of the boy and the boy gets annoyed because he cannot see the tv. The mum opens the blinds and the boy squints at the light when it comes in. Then the mum says it for you so he opens it and the dog jumps out. He liked the dog so he picked it up and then noticed that it only had three legs and he felt annoyed that it was missing a leg. He saw the puppy playing with a red ball the dog kept on falling over but it got up and kept playing that made the boy feel better and he chuckled but when the dog looked at him he made a mad face and looked away he kept on glancing out of the corner of his eye and looked at the dog then the dog came over and dropped the ball the kid looked at the ball for a bit and stood up and picked up the ball and put it in his pocket he only has 1 leg too so he picked up his crutches and went out the back and played catch with the dog then he did not feel bad about himself.

The end 



6 comments:

  1. Kia ora Josh. Thanks for sharing your present story. Unfortunately docs does not work well on the blog so it is better to copy and paste your work or screen shot it (in several parts if you need to) so people can see it properly. It's hard isn't it, getting a story told in 100 words?

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    1. Kia ora. Thanks I copied and pasted it now.

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    2. Awesome. Thanks for being so proactive! You are using some great vocab to add interest to your story - grumpy, annoyed, squints, chuckled, glancing. Keep up the great work.

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    3. Thank you,
      will try

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  2. Kia ora Josh, great to see you posting your mahi (work) online. Writing a 100 word story is quite a challenge! You have some great words choices, I particularly like: squints, chuckled and glancing. You used some full stops at the beginning - make sure you do this throughout your story as it makes it easier for us to read.
    I look forward to seeing more of your work. Kia pai tō rā. (Have a good day.)

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  3. Thank you for commenting on my blog,
    i hope your lockdown's going well,
    blog ya later Josh

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